G'day!
Having read the article, I found most of it unproblematic. Regarding the flavour text, specifically the epigraphs, they do tend to go on at too great a length. As the cliché has it, less is more; a single well-chosen paragraph at the head of each section would have been more effective.
I would also suggest, style-wise, that you keep an eye on the variety of sentence lengths. Short sentences can be effective. And the feeling I get is of too many complex sentences, where compound sentences could be more effective. And you may try, if you're adventurous, the tripartite sentence for a rhetorical flourish.
The game mechanics looks well done. It is laid out well, and easy to follow. Overall, with my remarks above in mind, you've done a great job, and I look forward to reading more; feel free to contact me outside the forum if I may be able to give you feedback prior to submission, ok?
I hope this helps!